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The Efficacy of Acupuncture in Treating High Blood Pressure

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The Efficacy of Acupuncture in Treating High Blood Pressure
Author: Arjun Vinayak Srivastava
Position: Clinical Researcher of the Prevention And Wellness Team (PAWT)
Instructor: Dr. Schnyer (TC 302)
26 November 2013

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Arjun Srivastava
UT EID: Avs 527
Dr. Schnyer
TC 302

Dr. Schnyer,

The comments made by Praveen and you were most helpful. The reviews urged me to further develop my claims. I took the initiative to revisit the studies and expand on the findings. In doing so I was able to construct a more cohesive paper that fit together well. This also led me to include an additional article further accentuating my argument. The reviews also helped pointed out mechanical errors that went unnoticed. I was able to identify phrases and words that needed revision. I was also able to correct a citation error.

Although the reviews offered contrasting opinions regarding my section entailing acupuncture’s efficacy in treating obesity, I used my best judgment to eliminate it entirely. I realized the section was lacking in both depth and relevancy. As a result the final product was much more focused, and the analysis was effective throughout without taking huge leaps in logic. I constantly questioned myself while revisiting and rewriting parts. I did not want to leave any loose ends. As a result I was able to produce a concrete argument with a clear goal, and clear path to achieving it.

Overall I felt the review process was effective in opening my perspective, enabling me to produce a piece I was proud of.

Arjun Srivastava


Cardiovascular disease (CVD) is the leading cause of death in the United States. Effective regulation of Hypertension (high blood pressure) is an essential part of cardiovascular disease prevention. However current clinical antihypertensive drugs are limited in effectiveness and possess notable side effects as well as a relatively large expense ("Heart Disease and Stroke...


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