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Disadvantage of Cell Phone

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Disadvantages of mobile phone

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In this era, the prosperity of advance technology is blossoming like mushrooms, growing in the back yard. Meanwhile, invented in 1973 by Martin Cooper, mobile phones nowadays are becoming one of the most popular pieces of technology and nearly everyone own a cell phone. Nonetheless, mobile phones bring not only easiness in communication area, but also many negative effects. Therefore, I am convinced that unsafe safety standard, negative health effects and infertility in men are considered as the disadvantages of mobile phone.

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      In this era, the prosperity of advance technology is blossoming like mushrooms growing in the back yard. Meanwhile, invented in 1973 by Martin Cooper, mobile phones nowadays are becoming one of the most popular pieces of technology and nearly everyone own a cell phone. Nonetheless, mobile phones bring not only easiness in communication area, but also many negative effects. Therefore, I am convinced that negative health effects, the effect on children and infertility in men are the main disadvantages of mobile phone.

Disadvantages of mobile phone

      In this era, the prosperity of advance technology is blossoming like mushrooms growing in the back yard. Meanwhile, invented in 1973 by Martin Cooper, mobile phones nowadays are becoming one of the most popular pieces of technology and nearly everyone own a cell phone. Nonetheless, mobile phones bring not only easiness in communication area, but also many negative effects. Therefore, I am convinced that negative health effects, the effect on children and the infertility in men are the main disadvantages of using mobile phone.

      First, negative health effects of using mobile phone have been proved by many studies. From the studies, mobile phone can emit microwave radiation that is detrimental to health. In...

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